|
Post by Tonetone1224 on Apr 14, 2009 15:10:48 GMT -5
are swear words ok for this site Glad u guys like my story. I had it in my head forever before actually writing it down
|
|
|
Post by Skyfire on Apr 14, 2009 15:11:24 GMT -5
Yeah, Chapter 7's redo was good, 'cept for the swear. Actually, I think that swearwords really AREN'T allowed, 'cause Kila (Alohalani) wanted to keep the site safe for kids... But I've still seen profanity here. Rewrites... *cringes* The story of... well, ALL my stories. xD You really do get better.
|
|
|
Post by Tonetone1224 on Apr 14, 2009 15:15:32 GMT -5
guess I should take it out though
|
|
|
Post by Warp Darkmatter on Apr 14, 2009 16:14:04 GMT -5
Swear words are allowed as long as you post are warning at the beginning of the chapter that says that there is PG or PG-13 material in the context. PG would probably be good for this.
|
|
|
Post by Tonetone1224 on Apr 14, 2009 16:14:38 GMT -5
Ok. thanks. I took the swear word out though.
|
|
|
Post by Warp Darkmatter on Apr 14, 2009 16:16:28 GMT -5
Oh, okay.
|
|
|
Post by xrsmechainic15 on Apr 19, 2009 15:28:28 GMT -5
dude totally awesome.
|
|
|
Post by Tonetone1224 on Apr 19, 2009 15:29:07 GMT -5
Thanks. There is more to come
|
|
|
Post by Tonetone1224 on May 2, 2009 13:41:45 GMT -5
*Random Tidbit(There is a quote somewhere in here from a show)*
Chapter 9 “Bonding”
ZURGS PALACE THROWN ROOM
Jana made her way into Zurgs thrown room very curious about what he wanted. He probably found out that she was the one who replaced all his purple capes with pink ones.
“I tell you I didn’t do it” Jana said, crossing her arms
“You did not do anything, Jana” Zurg told her puzzled “Anyway, I have hatched an idea”
“Lay it on me”
“Instead of looking into the rangers CPU and melting him, I have decided that you are going to earn his trust and get as much information as you can from him. Then when you get enough information, I have a special job for you.” Zurg explained, a smile on his face
“And what is this job exactly?” Jana asked puzzled
“You are going to become a member of Star Command by making them think you are a traitor to me.” Zurg could see the confusion on her face.
“And how are you going to do that, you may ask, well, you are going to help XR escape and then when you get to Star Command you shall ask to be part of Team Lightyear”
“You sure that will work” Jana asked knowing well that his plans always seemed to have a glitch of some sort.
“I assure you, Jana this plan is fool proof. This plan will work. I am sure of it. Oh and by the way, my son is coming over later.”
“You have a son? You? I never thought you as a family man.”
“You are right, I’m not. He is a robot that I created, with the help of the grubs, of course. So he is not biologically my son.” Zurg explained
“”What’s he like?”
“You will find out soon enough, but I have things to attend to. I would like you to make me something, actually. I need a rechargeable battery for my son. I would also like it if you did not tell XR about his arrival”
“Okay whatever” Jana replied as she walked out of the room.
Wonder why I can’t know about him Jana thought to herself Or XR for that matter. Whatever! I guess I should start on that battery. It’s a good thing Zurg did not find out what I did to his capes Jana made her way back to her lab and decided to turn XR back on for some company. She would enjoy the company. It could get pretty lonely without Warp there since he was usually helping her practice shooting and fighting. Her and Warp were getting pretty close, he was kind of like the brother she never had. He was kind to her, for the most part. Sometimes they would get into a big fight, but it was always about something small, like when Jana pulled a prank on Warp or when Warp yelled at her for messing up during a mission and Jana snapped back at him with a smart mouth remark.
Jana returned to her lab to find XR turned on and holding one of Jana’s inventions.
“How’d you get turned back on?” Jana asked startling XR and making him drop the invention, thus breaking it
“Oh. I am sorry. I am so sorry” XR stammered “Please don’t be mad”
“It’s ok, it’s not that important. What is important is how you turned back on”
“I just did. Please don’t turn me off, I rather like being turned on”
“I will. Just make yourself at home, but please don’t touch ANYTHING, or I will turn you back off.”
“Sure, ok.”
“So, XR, you wanna talk about anything? I have to make something, but I want to get to know you better” Jana said sitting in a chair
“”Like what?”
“Like, hmmm”
What was there to ask? She couldn’t just ask him about secrets of Star Command or anything like that.
“Well, what does XR stand for anyway?” Jana asked
“It stands for Xperimental Ranger. I was created by the LGM’s. My work order was slipped in with their vacation plans” XR explained.
He seemed to like telling about himself
“Doesn’t experimental start with e, not x.”
“Hey I’m not the one who named me” XR said crossing his arms
“What about you, I don’t think you ever told me your name”
“Oh, right sorry.” Jana giggled “My names Jana and I am from a planet called Mearth. I am not from this universe, though.”
“That’s cool. Hey what’s that you are working on?” XR asked pointing to the thing on her desk
“Oh that? That is a battery pack. Zurg told me to make it for him, but never told me why”
“So does that mean that you are the mechanic?”
“Do I look like a mechanic” Jana asked crossing her arms and smiling
“Well…”
“Don’t answer that.” Jana said rolling her eyes “I am the same thing that Warp is, a henchmen or, in this case henchwoman. Except that, unlike Warp, I only get paid 10 dollars a week”
“That hardly seems fair”
“That’s what I told him, but would he listen to me? No. I told him that he could pick a price and I think he took it a little too seriously” Jana looked back at the battery pack and started screwing in some screws “So what color do you think this should be. I was thinking of making it pink.”
“Won’t that make Zurg mad?”
“That’s the point, XR. It is a lot of fun to see his face when he is angry” Jana smiled “So… purple or pink?”
“You should just make it purple so he does not get mad. He may not let you be the one to work on me and I do not want him to be the one who does” XR explained. Jana could hear the concern in his voice
“Ok, fine. Purple it is then” Jana started painting it a dark purple with red stripes. “There, purple and red. I hope he likes it. What do you think?”
“I think it looks good.”
“I just hope it works. It is supposed to recharge on this thing right here and is supposed to be full of energy incase the owner runs out of energy.” Jana put the battery on the charger which had the same paint job as the battery, but it was red, with 2 purple stripes on each side. “I have to go give this to Zurg. Be back in a bit”
“Aren’t you going to turn me off?”
“Do you want me to?”
“Well, not really…”
“Ok then, no” Jana said as she left the room locking the door so it could only open from the outside “Bye XR”
“Bye”
|
|
|
Post by Skyfire on May 2, 2009 13:51:31 GMT -5
Aw, so cuuute! But, uh oh! NOS is coming! Here's hopin' XR'll be okay...
|
|
|
Post by Tonetone1224 on May 2, 2009 13:53:37 GMT -5
next chapter- What will happen to XR? Does the battery work? What's it for? Find out next chapter coming soon to theaters
|
|
|
Post by Warp Darkmatter on May 2, 2009 14:05:22 GMT -5
Ooooo, suspence...goodie.
|
|
|
Post by Skyfire on May 2, 2009 14:07:39 GMT -5
Yeah, ha-ha, cute.
|
|
|
Post by Tonetone1224 on May 2, 2009 14:09:06 GMT -5
As one man once said, Can't live with suspense; can't live without it
|
|
|
Post by Warp Darkmatter on May 2, 2009 14:13:50 GMT -5
Amen to that.
|
|