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Post by Eclipse'd on Apr 17, 2008 11:15:48 GMT -5
I'd have to agree with Kila on this one. I like reading fics that are lighthearted and fun, especially in the BloSC universe. One of the perks is that no one has to deal with any of those 'serious issues', there's enough of that in the real world, you know?
But I do like your writing style and good grammar, you are a very good writer. I'm just personally not fond of the plot myself.
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Post by Robbie Valiant, P.I. on Apr 17, 2008 11:27:58 GMT -5
But I do like your writing style and good grammar, you are a very good writer. I'm just personally not fond of the plot myself. Then I would recommend checking my other fic in progress, The Gift of Life. It takes itself far less seriously, though it is a crossover of BLoSC and Toy Story.
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Post by Robbie Valiant, P.I. on Apr 20, 2008 20:05:15 GMT -5
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Post by loony on Apr 20, 2008 23:58:13 GMT -5
I've got to say that I very much like the way this fanfic is going.
I'm glad you're touching on dodgy issues because I've read far too many bland fanfics in general that try to avoid anything dark and well, "not normal". And I frankly don't see the problem with it.
Keep up the good work!
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Post by Robbie Valiant, P.I. on Apr 22, 2008 17:47:33 GMT -5
Chapter 5 is in the works. Meanwhile, why don't you head over to the fanart section and check my illustration?
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Post by Robbie Valiant, P.I. on Apr 23, 2008 22:39:51 GMT -5
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Post by eez on Apr 25, 2008 18:37:24 GMT -5
Ohhh, what a rotten stinker! Trying to 'abort' the baby via violence! *works up a tizzy*
Say, I gots a question! How come there's no....how shall I put it....bigger uproar? Shoot. If I knew Mira and she was--for the lack of a better word--'impregnated' by a not-so-good gene pool, I'd be PO-to-the-Dizzled! I'd go bombad crazy on the Evil Emperor!
Keep it up though! I can't wait to see how it all ends!
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Post by Robbie Valiant, P.I. on Apr 25, 2008 21:36:43 GMT -5
Ohhh, what a rotten stinker! Trying to 'abort' the baby via violence! *works up a tizzy* Say, I gots a question! How come there's no....how shall I put it....bigger uproar? Shoot. If I knew Mira and she was--for the lack of a better word--'impregnated' by a not-so-good gene pool, I'd be PO-to-the-Dizzled! I'd go bombad crazy on the Evil Emperor! Keep it up though! I can't wait to see how it all ends! Oh, Zurg will get what's coming to him... It's just they're more worried about Mira's safety, for now.
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Post by cherryproductions on Apr 30, 2008 17:17:54 GMT -5
Whenever are you going to update again? i love this story it's keeping me in suspence all the way through.
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Post by mcarodon on May 3, 2008 13:51:13 GMT -5
i've read the story and it's really good. the insight of this issue is a touchy one, but you bring it some light on what could happen in the situation. awesome work!
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Post by Robbie Valiant, P.I. on May 5, 2008 21:41:15 GMT -5
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Post by eez on May 5, 2008 23:37:22 GMT -5
NO! NIEN! JAMAIS! NUNCA!!
Wha-wha-WHAT!? It ended just. LIKE. THAT?! Aw man! I know I read the epilogue ditty, but for cereal?! Zurg went down without a fight! *hyperventilates*
Still, the promise of a sequel has me excited. I wanted to know what the squirt looked like, and the Evil Emperor wanting to kill Mira right when she went into labour made me snarl. I'll admit! YES. I wanted to hurt something badly.
Wait....is Zurg dead? *cries* Say it isn't so! This brings trauma to the illusion that is my world! Hmm, that could be interesting. Haven't read a story where Zurg dies, and his....spawn is still running around the place. Creepy. Zurg spawn. Almost as bad as Zerg spawn, except not as slimey! Or all killey....yes.
Can't wait to read the epilogue!
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Post by Robbie Valiant, P.I. on May 7, 2008 9:39:28 GMT -5
Epilogue!And I am now definitely writing a sequel.. The idea of Team Lightyear + Warp trying to fight evil and raise the kid is just too appealing to pass up! XD
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