And she came with bad news..

[Alohilani]

You know, there are some mistakes, but if you want to PM the chapters to me before you post them, I could look them over and edit the mistakes out for you.

Other than that...

"No. I mean. If it have something to do with you opening me and touch.., I mean fixing the cables. Then yes, I'm injured"

FOR TEH WIIIIN.

[Breta]

That was rather entertaining.

[Breta]

spaceisnear said:

xph said:

That was rather entertaining.

Aw thank you <3

You're welcome.

[livielightyear]

NEXT CHAPTER! =D

That was a really good read. I loved how you wrote XR x3

[livielightyear]

SUSPENCE!! D=

x3 love it so faaaarr...

[levy120]

Woot, I like the last part very much :3
I'ts making progress... and it's doing that very fast... x3
And... it could be just me... but I think this was the most entertaining part yet :3

[levy120]

I know this feeling... :3
I'd like to comment it a little more extensive, if you want me to ^^
Means asking questions and stuff... xD

[levy120]

I need a break... xD
I can't concentrate anymore again... but still I want to post what I got til yet :3

C1

"ANDROID?!" Zurg yelled, irritated by the blatant uncoolness of that name.

Zurg is dah rul0r! *cough* Agent Z *cough*

PPPpbblllllllttttt, the machine said, beginning to smoke.

That must be a sound, only a machine could make… I tried it! x3

Jamie opened her eyes for the first time. The first thing she saw was a Grub.
"Mommy," she said certainly.
The Grub looked confused and shook his head.
Jamie bit her lip, tilting her head to the side. "Daddy then?"
The Grub turned to face his fellow Grubs. They all shrugged.
"Daddy!" Jamie yelled. One Grub looked oddly at her, "Wha?"
Jamie didn't look satisfied.
"Daddy," she insisted.
Another Grub looked at her, "Erm.."
Jamie crossed her arms and looked around. Then she stretched her neck and looked at one Grub.
"Daddy?" she asked. The Grub smiled a little, "Well.."
Jamie looked around once more and stared at the Grubs. Then she looked oddly at Zurg, "Wait, did I just count 263 dads?"

I like this whole part
It's sweet and... strange the same time xD

"Geez, Booster, I said I was- you didn't have to- oh, hi Dad... So, new mission. What is our new mission about Buzz?" XR asked.

I know it’s insignificant, but what was he doing anyway? xD

"Helloooo, nurse!" he yelped.

Animaniacs \o/
And such a fitting quote here xD

Mira could not look any more disgusted.

Buahahaha
...did I laugh loudly?

Jamie turned around again. Suddenly noticing a ranger suit somone had left on the floor, she bent down to pick it up- and heard a stifled squeal of, "sweet mother of Venus..."

Gee, I would kill him xD

"No, don't be sorry Big B," she apologized.

nicknames and I like that one x3

…At the same time. But not Mira.

Uh… jealousy x3

"What took you so long Warp. I've waited for an hour now!" Zurg yelled. Warp blushed and scratched the back of his head.
"Bath"

<3

Zurg frowned at this. "Because he's my worst enemy, Warp," he said with an air of trying to explain something to a retarded one-year-old.

x3 (way, my comments are becoming useful *cough*)

Zurg got a disgusted look in his face. "No Warp. Too dirty. I just want his DNA. You know. You could kill him and I could make a clone of him. Yes, maybe even a spy-Buzz. They'll never notice at Starcommand. BWAAAAAAHAHHAHA- *coughcough* Blech."

Always an evil plan on the back of the head… @@
(Though... Zurg doesn't seem to learn... I remember this cutey Epi... x3)


Mistakes:

he said in a buisnesslike tone.

I guess it’s businesslike?

When he saw Commadner Nebula

Commander :3

Every time she talked to one them they all wanted to give her an answer...

I guess here’s an “of” missing…?


C2

"I have a big family, actually. I have 263 dads," she said impressed of herself, standing up straight.

That sounds so... yeah... x3

Jamie looked at Booster with nervous eyes and began to sweat.

So she can sweat… but she can’t stand water, right… so what exactly is she sweating? (I'm starting to think too complicated again... after all this is a cartoony-fanfic... ^^°)

XR entered the room and scanned it with a predatory look. Seeing Jamie, he hurried over to her and looked up at her with a big, flirty grin.
"HI JAMIE" he said. Jamie jumped about a mile, then turned around and looked down at the robot with a definite degree of coldness in her expression.
She tried to turn and walk away from him, but he quickly got in her way.

ATTENTION! xD

Jamie tilted her head. Boy... friend. Oh. Like in... 'He's a friend of mine. And a boy.'

<3 Innocence <3

"That makes Mira my girlfriend, right!?" Jamie asked happily.

This one is so hilarious x3

"NO! I mean like when you -- yougooutlikevisitingsomeplacenicelikearestaurantorsomethingandyouholdhandsandeatfoodandstuffandthenyoumakeout," he insisted.

Although I don’t know what “to make out” is, I like this xD

DANG it. This ALWAYS happened to him. Nobody wanted to go out with him. Heck, most people didn't even want to touch him. And Jamie was no exception, apparently.

Poor XR
Though I must admit, I wouldn’t like to be hit on by him too xx”

Not wanting to let it go, Jamie opened her mouth to speak again-

Women… x3

Now, that wasn't very fair of the door.

xD

Buzz suddenly felt another evil presence behind him with his uber ranger skillz0rz.

Always fun to see x3
Though I think such things shouldn’t be in a serious fanfiction… aw, never mind ^^

Warp crossed his arms, "I mean. Does he have something that you really want to get your claws in? Or... is there nothing on TV again?"

"Nothing on TV, maybe," XR mumbled, feeling bored too.

Mira yawned widely. Yep, same ol stuff. Wonder if there’s anything on TV.

Lovely running gag x3

He clenched his fist and held it over his head. "I will find out what this plan is about Zurg. I promise yoooou!"

D:/ (<- hand xD) ... ... ... I use to much smileys xD

so she settled for “goggle… ugly… stare… face.”

nice... description… (first time I use one of these great smileys!)

Buzz looked over his shoulder and lifted an eyebrow. "For what?" he asked.

What a question x3
Great reaction… I wonder what he’s thinking right now… x3


Yay, that's it... for the first 2 chapters...
I'm not making a fazit now, because I know how it's going on and so...
I hope this quoting is okay and stuff... :3

[Alohilani]

...yeah, I'm beta-ing, so any grammar/spelling errors are my fault. XD; I must not have caught those.

[eez]

Lucky space...having a beta-er. I have to post it, read it on site, then correct. Tis a meticulous process...and I miss some of my mistakes until I read it like the fifth time or something XD

[levy120]

So... I guess amongst others that the TV-thing was from Kila... I dunno why... somehow fits her style ^^
But I could also be wrong... xD

eez said:

Lucky space...having a beta-er. I have to post it, read it on site, then correct. Tis a meticulous process...and I miss some of my mistakes until I read it like the fifth time or something XD

I'm reading them just one time before posting... and correct them in another Doc called "Titel of the fanfic Vol2" and your're gonna laugh about my desktop there are... files... called
"k3 vol3.4.2.doc"
^^°
Mistakes are nothing bad... everyone makes mistakes... xx"
We're learning from them and that's a good thing also...
I make tons of mistakes and don't even recognise them, so... xD
And eh... I lost the plot oo"

[aerinsol]

yay! Chapter 5's finally here!
*hugs Spaceisnear then starts reading*

[eez]

D: It's a sad story so far! Zurg, that scumbag! You make me want to give him a lazy horn! *cracks knuckles*

Please say Jamie is alright! She doesn't deserve to die! DX

[eez]

Good! I don't want Jamie to die...sad stories make me leak from the eyes