A New Commer

[Tonetone1224]

ch. 3
Chapter 3 “A Little Backround”
ZURGS PALACE
THROWN ROOM 7:30 PM

“How long are you planning on keeping her down there?” Warp asked

“Oh I don’t know. I was thinking a couple of years."

“But she’s just a kid. Besides, she was pretty tough to be able to pin me on the ground so easily. She may come in handy at one point.” Warp stated. He was actually a little worried for the poor kid

“You may be right Warp. I think that I may give her a chance. I should go talk with her.” Zurg said happily before making his way to the holding cells.

ZURGS PALACE
HOLDING CELLS 7:35 PM

“Hello, anybody home?” Zurg asked knocking on the

"No duh" was her response

“Oh good. I was just in the neighborhood when I decided to come visit” Zurg said

“Ha, ha. Very funny. What do you want?”She asked

“Merely want to talk. Is that so much to ask?”

“Why yes, yes it is” she replied coldly.

Just then the door to the room opened to reveal Zurg with his arms signaling Jana to come out. Jana walked out before Zurg changed his mind.

“What’s with the sudden change of heart?” Jana asked nicely as possible

“Oh nothing. I just wanted to apologize for putting you in a cell. It was quite rude of me to put you in there without letting you explain anything. Let’s say we talk about things while eating dinner. You must be quite hungry.”

Well she was sort of hungry, at first she was hesitant, but Zurg somehow persuaded her into coming for dinner.

ZURGS PALACE
DINNER ROOM 7:50 PM

“Here, have something to drink” Warp said, throwing a can of oil at Jana

Jana looked down at the can of oil with a face of disgust.
“Hey what’s wrong? Don’t robots like oil?” Warp asked

Well that was not smart.

“A ROBOT!!! I AM NOT A ROBOT!!! I am a cyborg, meaning, I am both robot and human, but I still eat and drink human food!” Jana yelled angrily “No one seems to understand that. Everywhere I go it’s the same thing. “What’s a robot doing eating a sandwich?” and “Hey look at that freak. She has robotics parts. Let’s all point and laugh at her.” It is starting to really get on my nerves. Why doesn’t anyone seem to understand!!!!?”

Once Jana was done with her little outburst she slumped down in her chair almost completely out of breath.

“Oh. Sorry I…I hadn’t realized.” Warp said amazed at how fast her personality changed.

“Thanks. Sorry for that. It’s just that it angers me so much. Ever since my dad turned my body into a robot everyone has made fun of me. All because of how I looked. Even my sister makes fun of me. My dad and my dog, killer are the only ones who are nice to me and treat me like and actual person. I am adopted and my dad STILL treats me like a daughter” Jana said sadly

Just then a grub came in with a plate of Mac N’ Cheese for Jana, and chicken for both Warp and Zurg. Jana was then given a glass of beer. Beer…really…they gave me beer, Jana thought to herself, How stupid can you get?

“Umm, I am very thankful for your umm… hospitality, but…you do know that I am only 13, thus I am still a KID. Jana asked.

“Oh I am very sorry for that” replied Zurg suddenly put a swirly straw into the drink “Is that better?” he asked

Jana rolled her eyes and pressed a blue button on her arm. A Root Beer popped out of her arm and she caught it, opened it, and started drinking.


So. what do you think.

[Skyfire]

Aw, cute and funny! ;D

[Warp Darkmatter]

Hopefully you already saw my comment on FF.net, but just in case you didn't, this is a great chapter.

[Tonetone1224]

I did see your comment. Thanks. i had so much fun writing Jana's outburst. She can be rather fiesty, but she does, deep down, have a softer side...deep, deep down as long as treat her right. She is one to hold a grudge for sometime depending on what they did.

[Tonetone1224]

My next chapter is almost complete. Complete I tell you COMPLETE!!!!!!!

Sorry...

[saron]

XDDDDD This is great. I love te crazy straw.

Hence, why Zurg can't have kids.

[Tonetone1224]

Hence Why I made Jana come to zurg instead of star command

[Tonetone1224]

And here is ch. 4

Chapter 4 “Hired”

ZURGS PALACE
OUTSIDE DINNER HALL 9:30 PM

Man was it late; well, for Jana anyway. She had to get back home, which was actually a deserted old building, so that she could get up early enough to have time to look for a new job. Seeing that after her outburst earlier landed her in a cell, there was no chance that the emperor had the time, nor the patients to put up with her.

“Well” she started, “it’s getting late and I have to go to trade world for some shut eye. I have to get up early tomorrow to look for a job” She finished after walking out of the dinner hall

“Wait.” Zurg said “You really shouldn’t walk around Planet Z, let alone Trade World, around this time of night. Why don’t you stay here for the night and tomorrow we can escort you back home, hmm”

Jana thought about this. Well he does have a point. Last time she was on Trade World at night some guy mistook her for a full robot and tried to attack me for parts. That did not end well. He ended up stealing her gameboy.

“So, Do want to stay or what?” Zurg interrupted her impatiently

“Well…Okay, but where will I sleep?” She asked

“There’s a guest room that you can stay in. Kind of small, but
homey. Warp!” He called

“Yes?”

“Show Jana the guest room.”

“Sure. Come on kid lets go”

“Right behind you.” Jana called, chasing after Warp “And don’t call me kid”

ZURGS PALACE
HALLWAYS 9:35 PM

Jana was amazed at all the machinery and how much purple there was just in the hallways. After a while, Jana started to get a little bored and decided to ask her “tour guide” about himself.

“So, Warp” Jana asked “Why did you decide to become a criminal and work for Zurg anywhy?”

“Mostly for the money” Warp answered

“Oh, you’re one of those”

“One of what’s?”

“One of those would be the people who care more about money then their friends”

“What would you know” Warp said angrily “Why did you huh?”

“Just love the feel of committing crimes, like robbing houses and stuff like that. That and, my dad is a part of a highly respected mafia. Not the terrorist kind, but the taking over parts of planets, but letting the native people still own their own homes and can live their normal lives.”

“Well aren’t you little miss hotshot” Warp retorted

“What it’s not like I go around bragging about it. It’s not that big a deal, anyway.”

“Is that so” Warp said, rolling his eyes
Jana did just the same

“Anywho” Jana started “What did you do before becoming an evil henchman?”

“Oh I worked for Star Command” Warp said

“Star Command? What kind of name is that. What do they do? Command stars?” Jana said, chuckling at her little joke

“What you’ve never heard of Star Command. Everybody knows
about Star Command”

“I take it you’re a fan?” Jana asked

“Heck no. I hate it. They are always trying, and succeeding, to foil Zurgs attempts to take over the cosmos. Why do you think I quit? That and that annoying Buzz lightyear and his team of rookies”

“Never heard of em’”

“Well how about tomorrow I show you around and tell you about them, huh?”

“Sure that would be great except that I am leaving tomorrow remember?”

“Oh yeah” Warp said, sounding disappointed and kind of confused

They soon arrived at the guest room and Jana and Warp parted for the night. In the room Jana slumped in bed and went to sleep.

ZURGS PALACE
GUEST ROOM 7:00 AM

Jana awoke to the sound of Zurgs voice over an intercom. Why the heck is he waking me up at 7:00 in the morning, Jana thought, oh yeah, he is escorting me back to Trade World. Jana remembered

“Jana, come on get out of bed” Warp called from the opposite side of the door “Zurg wants to talk to you and he is getting rather impatient”

“Yeah, yeah, I’m commin’” Jana called opening the door to her room.
Warp turned and led Jana to Zurgs thrown room. “Come on, this way”

ZURGS PALACE
THROWN ROOM 7:15 AM

Jana made her way into the room and saw Zurg hovering towards her, a grin on his face

“Jana, good morning. I take it you slept well?” Zurg asked, still grinning

“Yeah took me a while to fall asleep, but I did sleep well.”Jana
Answered tiredly

“Well that’s good. Oh and Jana?”

“Yeah, Zurg?” Jana asked sounding confused

“Oh it’s too early to say good bye, Jana”

“What are you talking about?” Jana asked, confused

“How would you like a job working for me?”Zurg asked

Well that was unexpected, Jana thought for sure that Zurg would be mad at her still for trespassing on his planet. Jana was very confused and it was easy to tell by the look on her face.

“Really, do you mean it?” Jana asked still a little surprised

“Well of course I mean it, Jana. So do you want to or not” Zurg asked, trying to hold back his excitement

“Yes, yes I will. Thank you so much” Jana said, beaming with enthusiasm.

“Hey welcome to the team, kid” Warp said

“Warp, would you show Jana around so that she may get familiarized with my palace?” Zurg said half asking, half commanding

"It would be my pleasure” Warp said enthusiastically


So.. how is it so far. i have so many more ideas. I will probably never finish this because it may never end.

[Warp Darkmatter]

That was awesome! Oh, I love this chapter. You had me laughing and going 'uh-huh' the whole time. More?

[Tonetone1224]

Yes. there will be a lot more comming. it will never end, remember

[Tonetone1224]

Chapter 5 “The Tour”

ZURGS PALACE

HALLWAY 7:20 AM

Man, Jana had never seen more purple in her life. Every where she went, there was something purple in every room. They soon entered a room that was full of what seemed to be weapons of some sort. They seemed to have been destroyed at some point.

“Wow. What’s with all the machines?”Jana asked looking around anxiously

“Oh” Warp replied “These are all the machines that Zurg has tried to use to take over the galaxy”

“Does he build all these himself?” Jana asked

“Oh no. Zurg just sits on his thrown and gets the Brains and Grubs to make everything” Warp explained

“Why do people do that? Why can’t they just make their own things?” Jana asked, rolling her eyes. “I mean, I am 13 and I have already invented my own things that work.”

“Well Zurg isn’t always the best with erm… machines, he just won’t admit it.”

“Oh I see. Well anyway, think Zurg would mind if I came in here at some point and fiddled with his machines?” Jana asked, hope could be heard in her voice

“You should ask him.” Warp answered “He can sometimes be…difficult”

“Okay, I will” Jana stated

“Come on, let’s continue with the tour”

“Yes sir” Jana said following Warp out of the room

Once they were in the hallway Jana and Warp turned a corner and continued their conversation

“So, Warp, Who is this team Lightyear anyway?” Jana asked

“Oh he’s just my old partner. He works for Star Command and is always the one to foil Zurgs plans. He leads a team of 4 rookies. I could show you the data central on the team. Zurg keeps it just in case he figures out anything like weaknesses of the team” Warp answered back

“That would be great. So, where is this place?”

“It’s over on the east side, come this way”

“Coming right behind you”

ZURGS PALACE

TEAM LIGHTYEAR DATA ROOM 7:50 AM

They soon arrived at the data room and inside there was a big-screen TV with a computer attached to it. Jana stared at it with awe.

“Have a seat and take a look” Warp said gesturing to a chair

“Thanks, I will” Jana sat down on the chair and Warp turned on the screen.

“Hmm. Lets see.” Jana said clicking on a picture of Buzz lightyear a bio of him popped up

NAME: Buzz Lightyear

OCCUPATION: Space Ranger

SPECIES: Human

HOBBIES: being a Space Ranger, keeping peace

AGE: Unknown

LOVE INTEREST: Star Command

LIVES: In a house

FAVORITE PLAYS TO BE: Star command

WHERE HANGS OUT: Star Command, on patrol, Cosmos

PET PEEVES: Evil, and Criminals

“It seems that Buzz really likes Star Command. And I mean, a lot” Jana commented

“Oh yeah. And he just has to follow everything by the book. It got so annoying” Warp said

“Let’s look at the next member” Jana said ignoring Warps comment

NAME: Mira Nova

OCCUPATION: Space Ranger; rooky

SPECIES: Tangean

HOBBIES: Shopping, being a Space Ranger, hanging out

AGE: Unknown

LOVE INTEREST: Unknown

LIVES: In apartment

FAVORITE PLACE TO BE: Anywhere away from home

WHERE HANGS OUT: Cosmos, anywhere away from home

PET PEEVES: Dad

“She doesn’t seem so bad.” Jana stated “at least she isn’t in love with where she works”

“She is actually pretty tough” Warp said “But she is just a rookie. Not that big a deal.”

“Okay next one” Jana said

NAME: Booster

OCCUPATION: Space Ranger; rookie

SPECIES: Jo Adian

HOBBIES: hanging out with Buzz, Fighting crime with Buzz

AGE: Unknown

LOVE INTEREST: Unknown

LIVES: In a house

FAVORITE PLACE TO BE: With Buzz

WHERE HANGS OUT: With Buzz

PET PEEVES: Criminals

“Wow, these guys are all just so lame, there is nothing special about any of them.” Jana said throwing her arms in the air

“Well there is one more, but we do not know much about him that is important” Warp said “But we are going to somehow find out more about all of them”

The next on caught Jana’s attention. It was a small robot that looked pretty cute.

“Awe, he’s so cute” Jana said smiling

“Ugh, you really think that tin toy is cute.” Warp said sticking his tongue out is disgust

“Yes actually I do. Now shut up so that I may read it” Jana said, sounding offended

NAME: XR

OCCUPATION: Star Command robot ranger

SPECIES: Robot

HOBBIES: Unknown

AGE: Unknown

LOVE INTEREST: Unknown

LIVES: At Star Command

FAVORITE PLACE TO BE: At star command

WHERE HANGS OUT: Star Command, with Buzz and co.

PET PEEVES: Unknown

“Wow” Jana said “There really isn’t much on him, is there”

“Told you so” Warp said proudly
Jana just rolled her eyes


Yay. The next couple of chaps have nothing to do with the story line. They are just fun fillers.

[Tonetone1224]

Chapter 6 “The Ice Cream Mishap”

1 Week Later

Living with the Evil Emperor was a lot of fun. Jana could have her own weapons and Zurg even let her toy with his old machines. She had already fixed and perfected 3 of them, Zurg was very pleased with her work. There were downsides though, like whenever a plan failed Jana and Warp were blamed. And if Jana or Warp had a plan, like tricking Buzz into giving them secrets, Zurg would say “No, no, that plan would never work. Hmmm…Oh I got it, we can trick Buzz into giving us secrets about Star Command.” Jana would try to argue with him, but she would always be brushed aside. Jana did get punished for many things, from arguing with Zurg to not listening to his orders, no matter how stupid they were. He would send her to her room and take away one of the weapons she made
herself and destroy them…

ZURGS PALACE
DINNER ROOM 8:00 PM

“So, Jana, how was your day?” Zurg asked Jana, taking a umm… bite of his lasagna

“It was really great. I went to Trade World and met some guy named Cromford Lorak.” Jana said smiling

“Oh great” Warp exclaimed “Did he try to cheat you out of your money?”

“Yeah. It actually worked, but then I dressed in a black robe and tricked him into giving me my money back, and then some” Jana said, giggling. “I just don’t like being tricked”

“Good for you Jana” Zurg said, proudly “I was right to offer you a
job”

“Thanks” Jana said “What’s the plan for tomorrow. Are we doing anything fun, or am I going to be bored out of my mind all day?”

“You and Warp are going to Mahambas six to meet Kino and get some illegal firearms” Zurg answered

“Yes! And I am coming to help right, not just sit in the ship and wait for you to finish” Jana asked

“Of course you are coming” Warp answered “If the rangers come we will need all the help we can get, right Zurg”

“Exactly” Zurg agreed with Warp

“Cool. Well I am going to get ready for bed and watch TV, is that okay?” Jana asked, getting up from the table

“Yes, yes, go ahead” Zurg answered. “You’ll need all the rest you can get for tomorrow”

“Thanks. Bye” Jana yelled as she made her way out of the dining room

“So, is she really going to help me tomorrow, or were you just kidding” Warp asked

“Of course I mean it you dip-stick” Zurg said, sternly “I would not lie to one of my henchmen. And a good one at that”

"Oh… of course” Warp said

ZURGS PALACE
TV ROOM 8:30

Once Jana was done getting ready for bed, she plumped down in front of the TV. She found a movie called “The Terminator” and it was very good. Half way through, Jana started to get a little hungry

“Man, I sure could use some dessert” Jana exclaimed to herself

“Wonder if he has any popsicles I could have”
Jana got up and made her way to the kitchen.

“Hmmm…Lets see” Jana said opening the freezer “There’s ice cream, cookies, and popsicles. I think I will eat a Popsicle”
It was the last one in the box, but Jana just left it in the freezer, and made her way back to the TV. Sometime later, Zurg came into the kitchen for a late night snack. He was looking forward to that last Popsicle that he had been saving, but when he opened the freezer and took out the Popsicle box, it was empty. What, Zurg thought to himself, who dares take the last Popsicle? I was so
looking forward to eating it. Zurg took a hold of the nearest Grub

“Who, might I ask, took the last Popsicle” Zurg asked the terrified Grub

“Ummm…” started the Grub “I think I saw Jana in here last with a Popsicle, your “purple-ness”

“JANA!!!!!!!!!!”

ZURGS PALACE
JANA’S ROOM 10:00 PM

Jana awoke with a start as her name was blared into the speaker. She looked at her built-in watch. What is Zurg doing calling me this late at night Jana thought to herself as she made her way out of her room.

“Jana report to my thrown room” Called the intercom “Hurry up before I get really impatient”

“Oh put a sock in it. I’m coming. Sheesh” Jana complained, starting
to pick up the pace

ZURGS PALACE
ZURGS THROWN ROOM 10:15 PM

Now what did she do? Jana was very annoyed that she was woken up at 10:00. It was late and she was tired. When she got into the throne room she saw many frightened Grubs, Warp looking very nervous, and Zurg with a very bad look on his face. He looked like he was really mad for some reason.

“Uh…you called, sir?” Jana asked nervously

“Why yes, yes I did” Zurg answered getting off his throne and hovering towards Jana with what seemed to be a box in his hands.”

“What did you need?” Jana asked, trying to hold back her nervousness “I would like to get back to bed soon. I am very tired”

“Don’t get snippy with me, young lady” Zurg asked annoyed

“Uh sorry” Jana answered

“Let’s get down to business” Zurg exclaimed holding the box out in front of him. “What is this”

“Umm… a box?”

“What kind of box?”

“A Popsicle box” Jana answered, confused

“Yes, and what was the last thing in this box?”

“A Popsicle”

“What flavor?”

“Blueberry” Jana knew where this was going, but decided to play along, just in case

“And what is my favorite flavor”

“Blueberry” Jana answered Oh great, she definitely knew where this was going

“Good. Now, did you eat the last blueberry Popsicle?” Zurg asked, already knowing the answer

“Yes” Jana answered “But it’s just a Popsicle, it’s not that big a deal. They hardly cost anything”

“This is exactly why your punishment is that you have to buy me another box”

“What?! It’s just a stupid box of Popsicles! I am not going to buy you another box just because I ate the last one! It’s just a Popsicle It’s not like I ate the last one in the universe!” Jana snapped before realizing that was not the best thing to do when there was an angry evil emperor in front of you “Uhh…sorry”

“DO NOT YELL AT ME AND DO AS I SAY!” Zurg snapped “You should know better than to yell at me. For that I am not going to allow you to participate in the unlawful acts that are occurring tomorrow”

“Hey that’s not fair” Jana complained

“Your evil emperor” Warp stated “Don’t you think that’s a little harsh. Besides we may need her tomorrow. Last time we tried that the rangers stopped us because I was the only strong one there and had no helpful back up, remember”

“Very well, Warp” Zurg gave in “You win, but, Jana”

“Uhh…yeah?” Jana asked worried

“You still owe me a box of Popsicles”

“Okay, sure” Jana said following Warp out of the room
Outside, in the hall, Jana caught up to Warp

“Hey Warp” Jana called “Thanks”

“No big. We henchmen have to stick together. Good night.”

“Night”

Jana walked back to her room still a little shaken at what happened a moment ago



Yay next chappy. AM I going too fast

[Tonetone1224]

Does anyone think that they could help me with a fighting scene. I am not very good at them and need tips.

[Tonetone1224]

In the next chapter the space rangers come into play.

[Warp Darkmatter]

No, you're not going too fast. In fact I enjoy reading your work.